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I don't know what keeps me going
or which way I'm to be moving.
Why am I here, what am I to do?
Why is there a me and no you?

I've tried to hold on by myself.
It has gotten me nowhere.
I've tried to only depend on God,
and that leaves me here...

What is going on around this place?
What keeps me moving when I cannot look into a face
and see that I'm needed, loved, wanted...
'Tis so upsetting to be so alone and faulted.

No one will come to rescue me,
and heal the pain behind my eyes.
For no one cares to look,
and see beyond my happy lies.

Once I thought I saw an angel with wings,
looking up I said "Please heal these things".
She turned her back and flew away.
Down in my dark pit, here I will stay.

That is, until somebody can see the truth,
hold my heart, and set my soul free.
How I yearn for that blissful day,
when she comes, and I can love for eternity.
©2007-2009 =0neMoreTyme
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Submitted: October 20, 2007
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Couldn't keep away...

Don't care if you like it or not... These poems are how I deal with my life.

If you cannot tell, this poem is basically about my current situation, all alone and needing somebody to love on as much as having somebody to love me.

EDIT:Realized I had a few commas where I wanted periods... changes the overall meaning slightly, but greatly impacts that one stanza.

Major!!! realized it said "see the pain behind my eyes" was supposed to be "heal" how that slipped by for so long, I dunno...
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Mood: Content *JenniferG:iconJenniferG: Oct 21, 2007, 7:56:20 AM
Well done, Slim. :) It's a very nice, well put together poem.

Please keep hope that someone will come to you. Your poetry alone is amazing, and that is only the reflection in the water of how amazing you truly are.
=0neMoreTyme:icon0neMoreTyme: Oct 21, 2007, 8:29:10 AM
mm

one can only dream for so long before reality sets in...

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Mood: Love ~TriGod07:iconTriGod07: Oct 22, 2007, 3:20:10 PM
Beautifully written, though the feeling is not.

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"Everyone makes mistakes...But have you ever made a mistake that you wanted so badly to go back and fix?"
=0neMoreTyme:icon0neMoreTyme: Oct 22, 2007, 3:21:49 PM
thanks... and I'm not quite sure there was a feeling on display. I wrote what flowed out of me into a poem... then I wrote how I felt in the comment.

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Live in Love, Strength, and Self-Control - Cobalt-Blood
Clubs: =RawEm0tion
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~TriGod07:iconTriGod07: Oct 22, 2007, 3:26:38 PM
There wasn't a feeling on display, I was referring to the emotion in the poem...and in the comment. ^_^

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"Everyone makes mistakes...But have you ever made a mistake that you wanted so badly to go back and fix?"
=0neMoreTyme:icon0neMoreTyme: Oct 22, 2007, 3:29:33 PM
Ah, my bad...

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Live in Love, Strength, and Self-Control - Cobalt-Blood
Clubs: =RawEm0tion
~ [link]
~TriGod07:iconTriGod07: Oct 22, 2007, 3:31:12 PM
No no! Don't worry about it! Just be proud of the amazing work you've done! ;)

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"Everyone makes mistakes...But have you ever made a mistake that you wanted so badly to go back and fix?"
=0neMoreTyme:icon0neMoreTyme: Oct 22, 2007, 3:45:21 PM
thx :)

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Live in Love, Strength, and Self-Control - Cobalt-Blood
Clubs: =RawEm0tion
~ [link]
~TriGod07:iconTriGod07: Oct 22, 2007, 3:49:08 PM
You are most welcome! :)

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"Everyone makes mistakes...But have you ever made a mistake that you wanted so badly to go back and fix?"
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